Tyler, I like how you opened your pitch with a question. It gets people thinking about the scope of the problem. As a student in college, I think a lot of us know at least one person who has a nicotine addiction (mostly due to the rise of the kid-friendly flavors). My only feedback for your pitch would be to present your solution sooner. It is easy to lose your audience if you wait until the end of the solution to pitch your idea! ~Izzy C.
Tyler, I like how you opened your pitch with a question because it draws the audience in closer while introducing your general concern. I feel as though most people know someone who is hooked on nicotine and have issues quitting, it is something most have encountered once in their life. The only feedback I would recommend is maybe including a startling fact in there to entice the audience more and tackle your solution portion sooner in your pitch. Also, I think it would be beneficial to consolidate your target audience because not all nicotine users are willing to quit. Are your targeting college students specifically? Overall, great work and looking forward to seeing your ideas develop! Romi
Tyler,
ReplyDeleteI like how you opened your pitch with a question. It gets people thinking about the scope of the problem. As a student in college, I think a lot of us know at least one person who has a nicotine addiction (mostly due to the rise of the kid-friendly flavors). My only feedback for your pitch would be to present your solution sooner. It is easy to lose your audience if you wait until the end of the solution to pitch your idea!
~Izzy C.
Tyler,
ReplyDeleteI like how you opened your pitch with a question because it draws the audience in closer while introducing your general concern. I feel as though most people know someone who is hooked on nicotine and have issues quitting, it is something most have encountered once in their life. The only feedback I would recommend is maybe including a startling fact in there to entice the audience more and tackle your solution portion sooner in your pitch. Also, I think it would be beneficial to consolidate your target audience because not all nicotine users are willing to quit. Are your targeting college students specifically? Overall, great work and looking forward to seeing your ideas develop!
Romi